By Ron Lindsay
Jaelyn had considered slashing herself with the toothbrush shiv she’d fashioned. But if it were found on her it would be confiscated, and her venture would be over before it even started. The jagged rocks that formed the margin between the exercise yard and the camp’s caustic fog wall would have to do the job instead.
Before the end of the inmates’ rec time, Jaelyn slipped away from her group and sidled toward the rocks. She had to act quickly, before a sentry droid intervened. Looking at the knife-edged rocks, she reminded herself of her vow. “My baby, I promise I’ll come for you no matter what.”
She took a deep breath and let herself fall forward, ducking her head to the left. Jaelyn yelped as she hit the ground, pain exploding into her skull. The left side of her face throbbed. She opened her eyes. Blood streaked the rocks, but not enough. Jaelyn grabbed one with her right hand, jabbed it into her left cheek, making sure the sharp edge penetrated her skin, and dragged it.
One of the overhead drones scanned Jaelyn’s face, and an announcement immediately blared over the camp’s sound system: “Inmate Jaelyn Jones, 8932, in need of medical attention.”
In a moment, a sentry rolled up on all fours, its treads covering the ground rapidly. The sentry compressed its back into a flat surface, transformed two of its treads into grasping arms, and lifted Jaelyn onto its back, securing her with spider twine. Then Jaelyn was off to the infirmary. To Nuria.
Inside, the sentry carried Jaelyn past Nuria’s bunk. Nuria merely blinked in response to Jaelyn’s nod. It was all she could manage.
They had become friends soon after Jaelyn arrived at the camp. The two shared a deep commitment to the resistance against the military takeover, and in time, Jaelyn confided the reason she found her internment so difficult to endure, why her heart ached. Jaelyn had to get out, no matter the obstacles she had to overcome. For a while, there was little Nuria could do to console or encourage her, but when Nuria was diagnosed with terminal pancreatic cancer, she persuaded Jaelyn to see the silver lining.
Once in the infirmary, Jaelyn adamantly refused stitches, so the medic droids heavily bandaged her multiple cuts. Jaelyn would need the bandages’ adhesive later.
That night, the rattle in Nuria’s throat let Jaelyn know it was time. She glanced around to confirm there were no sentries in the infirmary and then took the pillow off her bunk. She straddled Nuria, her arms shaking. She hesitated. Nuria met her eyes.
Barely breathing, Nuria mustered her remaining strength and hoarsely whispered, “Do it, girl. Make my death count for something.”
Jaelyn’s stomach churned. She pressed the pillow over Nuria’s face. Nuria’s body kicked violently, involuntarily protesting her previous consent.
The spasms stopped. Nuria’s chest was still.
“Thanks, friend.” Suppressing a sob, Jaelyn kissed Nuria’s forehead, soon to be Jaelyn’s forehead if all went according to plan…
The shiv proved sharp enough for removing the skin from Nuria’s face, as well as two fingers from her left hand.
The grim surgery completed, Jaelyn ripped the bandages from her face. She then started a fire in her bunk, using smuggled paper as tinder and potassium permanganate and glycerin from the dispensary to ignite it. When the alarm sounded, she donned her bloody mask, using the adhesive from the folded bandages to secure it.
A sentry hurried in and herded the inmates into the darkness outside. Once there, drones scanned the inmates’ faces.
“Jaelyn Jones, missing,” came the announcement. Jaelyn’s heartbeat accelerated. Her plan had passed the first test.
Immediately afterward, two sentries entered the infirmary to search for Jaelyn, leaving two sentries outside with her and the other inmates. She had estimated it would take fifteen seconds to run the hundred meters to the fog wall. Jaelyn broke for it. The drone overhead scanned her face.
An alarm rang out, “Nuria Tamim, escaping.”
The two nearby sentries charged after Jaelyn. As they drew near, she tore off the remnants of Nuria’s face and tossed it to her left. She then threw the fingers to her right. Tracking Nuria’s DNA, as they had been programmed to do, the sentries veered left and right.
Seven seconds gone.
Her mask removed, Jaelyn’s bloody face was now exposed to a hovering drone, which immediately recalibrated. The sentries that had paused over Nuria’s body parts now turned and sped after Jaelyn, but her tactics had delayed them just enough—maybe.
Ten seconds gone. More than halfway to the wall. Jaelyn strained, willing her legs to move faster.
Twenty-five meters from the wall, the grassy ground changed to sharp rocks, among which were scattered caltrops. Jaelyn braced for the pain, reminding herself what was on the other side of the wall. Whatever the pain, she had to continue.
Two, three, four strides, then the piercing impact of a spike in her left foot. She ran on. Close enough to the wall to smell its acrid fumes, she heard the dull thud of a tranquilizer dart launch from one of the sentries. Jaelyn counted one-Mississippi, then rolled on the ground, lodging three caltrops in her body as she did so.
The dart passed over her. She sprang up. Before her loomed the fog wall, a hissing, undulating, chemical mist, five meters in thickness, which would coat anyone who tried to pass through it with scalding droplets. A wide river of agony. Inmates had been informed that the pain would stop any living thing in its tracks.
Jaelyn whispered to herself, “Nothing can keep me from you, my darling.”
She plunged into the wall, every inch of her skin instantly on fire. She felt her body hesitate, double over, then start to crumple to the ground. But a memory held her up, and she forced her legs forward.
Somewhere on the other side of the wall was her daughter.






Meant to hit 3 lightning bolts.
I really like your story because I felt the angst of Jaelyn’s desire to escape. What a great strategy!
Maybe you could develop your idea into a book. Aching to know what happened before and after.
Thanks! Glad you really liked it. I’ll take your comment about the mistake in rating as a moral victory. Maybe you were so excited by the story you tapped the wrong icon!
Very interesting. Pacesetter!
An optimistic tale of the future it would seem. We still get toothbrushes. It’s gotta be “My Baby She sent me a letter” by the Box Tops. I am sure we still have snail mail in the future; only way to escape the bots.
Good guess but try again!
Witty comment! Like your sense of humor. If we are ever faced with a dystopian future, may need that type of attitude to sustain us.
The images are grim, but the strong pacing really carries the story. The stakes are high for the protagonist, and that kept me reading to the satisfying end. You make the most of every word of this flash story.
Thanks, RC! I greatly appreciate your comments. From my perspective as the writer, pacing was a key element of the story, so I’m happy to hear that worked well for you.
Vivid descriptions really made me visualize the story. I found myself wanting more as I was nearing the end! Will a Part II be on the way?
Thanks. I’ll give your suggestion some thought. There’s a basis for expansion. After i wrote the story, I did find myself wondering what would happen to Jaelyn once she escaped.
Wow, okay, this is REALLY GOOD. So heavy, but so realistic! You handled every aspect so tastefully and skillfully. Amazing story!
Thank you so much! I was aiming for a gritty story with some tough, unpleasant decisions for the main character to underscore her determination, but I didn’t want descriptions of her actions to be too off-putting. I’m happy to learn you think I found the right balance/tone.
I’m not sure if this is a 70s song, actually, but is the song possibly Ain’t No Mountain High Enough?
I think the editors may have to make the official declaration, but you’re right. Good guess! Yes, the Diana Ross version was a 1970 recording.
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Superbly done. The ability to fool drones with stratagems a human wouldn’t fall for rang especially true. I’m with Ongaku, can’t wait to see the book!
Thanks, Tom. Knowing that you’re a writer of compelling sci-fi yourself, I’m very pleased that you liked it.
Yikes! Wow…
Harrowing is the right word, i think
And now to wish Jaelyn ultimate success in more ways than one!
Thank you. Glad it held your interest.
O_O this was wild and riveting and I couldn’t stop reading. So fast-paced, too, despite the grim tone. I loved it.
Thanks for coming along for the ride (or should I say accompanying Jaelyn on her bold run). Glad you enjoyed it.
It was a good read. Im curious to see what happens next.
Maybe I can do a follow-up. We’ll see.
It’s always amazing when there’s a word limit, it enables the real talent of the author to show.
Thanks. It is a challenge to tell a story that can stand on its own with that word limit. I had to do a few drafts, trying to figure out what was essential and what wasn’t. (And the Havok editing team was very helpful too!)
Exciting, with a protagonist that you can root for. Difficult to do with such a short limit. I would like to know if she at least reaches visual contact with her daughter.
For now, you’ll have to use your imagination. Were I able to continue with the story, I would have her get to her daughter — but only after overcoming some other obstacles.
its about determination to me
Oh, absolutely. That’s the core theme. I’m glad that came through.
It is great to see more of your work. There is so much action in a 1000 words.
Thank you. Hope to write for Havok again — and I’m working on some longer pieces for other publications.
Nothing’s like a mother’s love and some sharp imagery. Great read!
Thanks. Glad you liked it.
Interesting use of the body parts.
Yes … well, neither Nuria nor Jaelyn wanted anything to go to waste.