By Kanchana Menon
It was a dark, moonless night, and there was nowhere else to go. No bar in town stayed open this late. And for the life of him, he couldn’t remember where he had parked his car. He eyed a broad icy park bench by the sidewalk. It looked infinitely more attractive than his lonely four-poster bed. The frigid vastness of its crisp white sheetsโฆ He shuddered. But sleeping in public is NOT encouraged in these parts. He knewโฆ
I can walk home. It’s just three blocks awayโฆ Or is it four?
After all, he had grown up in these streets, and nearly half the buildings in this part of the town were built by his firm.
Wait, did I take a wrong turn?
Jeremy stared, bleary-eyed, at a colossal hull that blocked his way. Something he had never seen before. A concrete monster chopped in half, sinewy tendons of steel splaying out of its belly. It lookedโฆ
Beautiful.
He peered around. There was no one in sight. Not even a security guard? That’s oddโฆ Only luminescent tapes and yellow boards that glared at him: โWORK IN PROGRESSโ and an eerie glow that seemed to radiate from somewhere within the site.
I need a closer look. Just a little peekโฆ
Jeremy gingerly lifted the tapes and crept in. A gaping hole opened up a little ahead of himโa basement under construction, lined by unfinished pillars and beams, and a web of metal weaving in and out, sentinels ready to impale an unwary interloper. A blinding white light emanated from its depths. What is it? Had someone left the work lights on?
Like a moth drawn to a flame he edged in.
Is it worth the risk? If nothing else, the fall alone willโฆ
As if it matters to anyone. Who is there to mourn for me?
Jeremy emptied his beer can and tossed it aside onto the scrap heap nearby.
โOwww!โ
He stumbled, nearly landing in the basement pit. A cold chill crept up his spine as the aggrieved pile of trash unfurled.
โWhere is your hat?โ it demanded, rubbing its head.
โMy what?โ
An old woman glared at him.
โYour hat, Jeremy. H-A-T. Your yellow hard hat.โ
She knows me?
โThis is a construction site,โ she barked, her eyes flashing. โYou, of all people, should know that.โ
Her raspy voice sounded vaguely familiar.
โDon’t gape at me like a fool, boy. Take this and put it over your pate.โ She threw a faded hard hat at his feet. โOr just leave! This is no place for people like you!โ She walked away in a huff. Suddenly, it was dark again.
The bizarre meeting left him shivering.
What is happening to me? Once a successful builder, reputed entrepreneur. A respectable fifty-year-old gentleman. Now a grieving, broken soul. Getting drunk, trespassing into a construction site, andโฆ thinking the unthinkable?
And if not for that vagrantโฆ
His skin crawled.
Surely, I must be better than this.
He turned and tottered back to his villa.
The next day, Jeremy woke up feeling the sunrays kiss his eyelids. He had had a good night’s rest for the first time in ages. Today was going to be a great day. He resolved to finally move on with life. Get his act together. Return to work. But first, I need to go to that construction site. Find that old woman. And thank her.
His eyes were still foggy with sleep. And his head throbbed, as if still stuck in the tight helmet. A pungent fragrance chafed his tender nostrils.
Jeremy tried to sit up, but his body felt like lead.
Argh! These hangovers!
A profusion of beautiful bouquets swayed into his vision, blotches of color that filled a tiny, unfamiliar room.
Where am I?
His mouth filled with the taste of metal. An empty IV bag hung above, and a range of instruments blinked behind him, some with soft beeps and gurgles.
โAhโฆ I see you are awake, Mr. Jeremy! How are you feeling?โ
โUmโฆ good. Whoโฆ Who are you?โ
โI am Dr. Valerie, junior resident, Department of Neurology.โ She smiled. โI have been monitoring you for the past year.โ
โA year?โ He gulped.
โOh, no need to panic, Mr. Jeremy! You are in safe hands! The hammer impactโฆ ermโฆ Well, anyway, there is absolutely nothing to worry about now. Vitals are almost normal. Rest now.โ
โBut the old womanโฆโ
โAh yesโฆ That.โ She pointed to a dirty yellow helmet left upside down on the bedside table. Dented and decrepit, only bits of duct tape seemed to be holding it together. A bunch of oriental lilies lay inside, along with a dog-eared photograph.
โAn old lady brought them yesterday, claiming you would wake up today. She insisted you would want to see that broken thing!โ
The young doctor grinned.
He stared back, nonplussed. The band on his head seemed to tighten a little more with each passing minute. The sun seeping in through the open drapes was hurting his eyes. Was it noon already?
โOf course we cleaned it,โ she continued apologetically. โAnd normally we wouldn’t have let her in. But she said that it was important that you have this.โ
Fingers trembling, he reached for the black-and-white photograph inside the helmet. The picture seemed blurry at first. But it gradually yielded to his persistent stare. It was a forty-four-year-old Christmas card, the photo of a happy young woman hugging a bunch of beaming kids. They were all holding up their precious presents, toys she had just given them. The hard hat she was wearing looked just like the one that lay battered in front of him.
But all Jeremy could see in the yellowing picture was her warm smile.
Aunt Jenny!
The woman who had inspired him to follow his dreams, lent him money to open his first companyโฆ yet died, alone and penniless, in a homeless shelterโฆ twenty long years backโฆ


(26 votes, average: 2.62 out of 3)


loved reading you โค๏ธ
Thank you, Radhika dear! ๐
Well written! Nice flow of words.. Story ending with a nice twist keeping you thinking… ๐๐
Thank you, Harishetta! ๐ You are too kind! ๐
Well written… didnโt see that twist coming!
๐๐ Thank you, Smitakshi! Feeling really happy that you enjoyed reading it!
It was a really good story ….
Thank you so much, Gisha chechi! ๐
Beautiful beautiful story
Thank you, Aishu! ๐๐
Brilliant read.
Thank you, Shruti dear! ๐
Loved it ๐
Thank you, KP! ๐๐
Wonderfully written. What a visualisation, Loved it.
Thank you so much, Pooja! ๐ Really glad that you liked it!
Nicely written and beautiful message… Reminder to look back and checkup on people who have touched us, inspired us, given us a little push.. family, friends, acquaintances, way back to even our baby sitters.. Imagine how happy they would be to receive a call from us. After all these years..
Thank you, Aslam! ๐
Very true. Perhaps it’s something that we ought to do more often…
Wow….. A completely unexpected ending… Beautiful write up… I could literally feel the images building up in my head while reading the story… A nice short and crisp read…
Thank you, Neena! ๐ I’m really happy that you enjoyed it!
Here’s a secret though: it was the word limit that inspired me to tighten the story! Hehe ๐คญ๐
Very nicely written..
Thank you so much, Vivek! ๐
Amazing story, well documented and kick the anxiety level as we read throught. Cheers
Thank you, Praveen chetta! ๐ I’m really glad that you found it engaging!
Nice one. Good turns twists to raise the intrest of the readers.
Well done Kanchana
Thank you so much for your kind words, Siva! ๐ Feeling really happy that you found it interesting!
The story had a familiar tone of an accidental death or of a person in coma. Overall good.
Thank you, Meenu! ๐ I’m so happy that you took the time to read my story and give your feedback!
Lovely story..fast moving.
Emotional without being dramatic.
Crisp and clear.
Loved it.
Thank you so much, Aunty! Feeling really happy that you liked it! ๐๐
Fantastic writing Kanchana. Well done! Canโt wait to read more!! ๐๐ฝ๐๐ฝ
Thank you so much, Vishnu chetta! Careful what you wish for, though. I might bombard you with everything that I have written till date! ๐คญ
Left me shuddering with that ghost-story feeling! Really well-told! Saddened that he was a jerk to his auntie, but glad she still cares for him…
Thank you, Rose! ๐ Feeling really happy that you enjoyed it!
Aunt Jenny is a sweetheart, isn’t she? ๐ Wish I could have written more about her!
Great Read.. loved it โบ๏ธ
Thank you, Anoop chetta! ๐
Gripping stuff! Way to go Kanchana!
Thank you, Hari! ๐ Glad that you liked it!
Thanks for sharing your story!! I was definitely pulled along with this one. Hope to see more from you in the future!
Excellent story!
Thank you, Pamela! ๐
Very nice ๐
Thank you, Geethu! ๐
Amazing story, well-told and nice presentation. Keep up!
Thank you so much, Rema Aunty! ๐
Well written story. The imagination of the author is great.
๐ Thank you!!!
So beautifully written and wonderfully portrayed! :)
Thank you so much, Rasmi! ๐
Your story was exceptional. I loved the story and marvelled it. Thanks for a wonderful story๐ your writing is beautiful
Thank you so much dear Aysha! ๐
Very well constructed and kept me hooked till the end… Looking forward to more mysteries from you.
Thank you for your kind words of encouragement, Chris! ๐
It had a spooky element and a very engaging narration. Great story!
Thank you, Jennifer! ๐ Feeling really happy that you enjoyed it!
Ohhh *shivers* Love the eerie atmosphere!
Thank you, Beka! ๐ I’ve been trying to learn from all of you here at Havok! And it feels so good to join the family!
Very engaging story. Loved it. Would love more tales with twists like this.
Thank you, Donnaf! ๐ Feeling very happy that you enjoyed the twist!
Great and interesting story.
Thank you so much, Akhil! ๐
It was a very nice way to tie together his guilty conscience. Loved the read
This made my day, Keny! I was afraid whether I hadn’t been able to convey that well enough! Thank you! ๐
It kept me hooked till the end.
Thank you Mike! ๐ Feeling really happy that you found it engaging!
Very well written. Beautiful way the story is unfolded, every line keeping the reader guessing what comes next. The jigsaw pieces of Jeremy’s life are adroitly put in place by the author only towards the close of the story. Congratulations to Kanchana .
Thank you so much Ravi uncle for your kind and generous words… ๐ Your feedback means a lot to me.
Poor Aunt Jenny. ๐ญ
I enjoyed the story, especially the reveal as to what was going on with Jeremy. Nicely done!
Thank you Lisa! ๐ Feeling really happy that you enjoyed reading it!
And yes, about Aunt Jenny… ๐ข
Very taut writing. Was wondering where it is leading to.
Thank you Sam! ๐ Hope the ending didn’t disappoint you!
Nice read!!! ๐๐ผ๐๐ผ๐๐ฝ๐๐ฝ
Thank you CJ! ๐
Very good ending.. Did not see it coming
Thank you, Brian! Glad that you enjoyed it! ๐
Great one.. Wonder how you always manage a twist at the end!!!
Hehe ๐ (*blushes) Thank you, Meera!!!
Well written with a nice message. Really liked the way of story telling, touching every detail and yet crisp.
Thank you, Manek! ๐ Glad that you liked it!
Lovely story, with a touch of mysticism(pardon me, if I’ve gone wrong in my assessment),tender emotions inviting a tear or two๐๐Keep telling soothing stories life looks for, Kanchana dear๐๐๐
Thank you so much, Velyamme! ๐ Feeling really happy that you read my story and enjoyed it! ๐
Good stuff. Thoroughly enjoyed it
Thank you so much, Shannon! ๐
Very good read. Enjoyed a lot
Yet again a gripping story and what a climax! A very nicley written piece!
Thank you, Partha! Feeling really happy that you found it engaging! ๐
Very nice story. Enjoyed it
Thank you, Lydia! ๐
It was a pretty good read, Kanchana. Given that it was short and yet more than enough to make me think of the next twist is enough to tell that it was really good :)
Enjoyed the connection between the start and the end, and the thoughtfulness it brings for the reader at the last moment, and as always, the detailed visuals you bring with your words ๐๐ฝ๐๐ฝ๐๐ฝ
You are too kind, Ashwani! Thank you so much! ๐
(P.S. I’m floating around on cloud 9! ๐)
Nice and well portrayed story. A good read indeed..
Thank you so much, Smrithy dear! ๐
Short , sharp and fast moving.
Well done.
Thank you, Radhamman! ๐
A very good story, enjoyed reading it very much. Well done. Waiting for your next story. ๐
Thank you, Sheila Aunty! ๐ I’m so happy that you liked it! ๐
Went on like a narration.Great !
Thank you, Balaji! ๐๐
Very well written dear.. beautiful story and I loved it. Long long way to go.. best wishes ๐๐๐
Divya, you have been really supportive and encouraging and I can’t thank you enough! ๐
Well written. The trait of a great storyteller is when the reader starts visualizing the words and you nailed it. As I was reading through the lines, my mind was literally depicting each scene. Looking forward to many more stories from you..
๐ Thank you for your kind and generous words, Vivek! But I deserve only a part of the credit… The editors were of great help in getting me to ‘show, not tell’! It was an amazing learning experience!
unpredictable story with a meaningful message,loved it to the end.
Thank you, Maneesha! ๐๐ I’m so happy that you enjoyed reading it!
Well written chechi..:)
Thank you so much, Sandhya dear! ๐
Very well written. Great buildup and a nice twist! Enjoyed reading it.
Thank you, Arun!!! ๐
Great story and cool use of the color yellow!
Thank you Arlan! ๐ To be honest, it took me a while to decide on the hard hat… (I was hell bent on writing a story on bananas initially! ๐)
Beautiful story..loved reading it..keep writing๐๐
Thank you for your encouragement, Sherin! ๐ Really happy that you liked it!
I like the twist at the end and the use of the hard hat. Good job.
Thank you Rae! ๐ ‘Yellow’ was a very inspirational theme!
At first I wanted more explanation. But the more I sat with it, the more I liked it. Well done, especially with all the descriptions!
Thank you for your kind words, AMediting! ๐ That you took the time to go through the story again and find something more each time… I can’t tell you how much this means to me!
Hai molae…nannayittundu…excellent work…..abhinandhangal….
Captivating, looking forward to read more by you
Thank you so much, Sansamma Aunty! ๐
Excellent work
Thank you, Naseera Aunty! ๐
Intelligently crafted and very well written, Kanchana๐Keep writing. Best wishes to you.
Thank you, Uncle! ๐ Really happy that you enjoyed reading my story!
Fantastic writing.. and what a climax..liked it..keep going Kanchana
I’m glad you liked it! Thank you, Anoop chetta! ๐
What a fun read. You must do a book of short stories Kanchana
Thank you so much, Pooja! ๐
Hopefully sometime in the future! ๐ค๐พ
Dear friends, family, and new friends I met here on Havok, I’m too overwhelmed by your responses to express how grateful I feel… ๐
Thank you, Ronnell Gibson, Leslie L. McKee and Andrew Winch, for your dedicated editorial attention and Kat Vinson for all the help!
Aw, now I’m sad. What a lovely story.
Thank you, YeahImAProser! ๐
Aunty Jenny’s plight made me sad too! ๐ฐ But… C’est la vie!
Enjoyed the twist ending!