By R. F. Gammon
What a nightmareāthe squealing brakes, the shouts, the crash.
It was enough to jolt Jenny out of bed and out the door in record time. She wasn’t sure what drew her to the old mansion, only that she had to go.
Leo had always hated that place.
The dark maw of the house before her yawned open, as if preparing to swallow her whole. Jenny wrapped her arms across her chest and forced herself to breathe. Invisible forces pulled her forward, closer, into the house’s embrace. Clammy cold hung on her skin, but she could not turn back. She had to go on.
Her instincts screamed no. Her feet said yes. She obeyed the stronger of the two and stepped through the front door.
The massive hall’s vaulted ceiling was riddled with holes. Vast swaths of white fabric draped across the vague shapes of furniture, like pale mausoleums rising out of the gloom. Jenny shivered.
Why was she here? The ache on her feet had drawn her here, yes, but in the end, she could not deny her main reason for entering the building. It was Leo’s fault. Just like everything else.
āAnd who are you, love?ā
Jenny’s scream echoed in the shadows. She never saw the figure approach. One second it wasn’t thereāonly the pale bones of an ancient staircase now crumbling to dustāthe next a young woman stood before her.
The girl’s teeth flashed white in her face when she smiled. Her black hair piled on her shoulders like a rat’s nest.
Jenny stepped back, away from the figure and toward the cold breeze at her back.
āIāI’m Jenny. Who are you?ā
The pale girl smiled. āIt’s not important,ā she murmured. āFor now, let’s get you checked in.ā
āChecked in? I can’t stay! I have toāā
āJust one night, lovie. It’s growing late; you have to stay.ā The girl turned and drifted down the hallway. āCome on, now.ā
āShe left me.ā A boy in a bellhop costume entered the lobby. Jenny jumped, and her nerves frayed still further.
āNo one cares,ā the pale girl snapped. She smiled at Jenny and beckoned. āYou’re on the second floor.ā
The stairs looked rickety, and Jenny hesitated at the bottom. They climbed into the gloom, draped in shadow. Fear touched her stomach, but she couldn’t turn back now. Leo would’ve hated thisābut Leo couldn’t stop her. She was invincible now, and she had to remember that.
āUp we go.ā The pale girl seemed to float over countless holes as she ascended. Jenny squeezed her eyes shut and followed her. There was no way this crumbling staircase could hold her weight.
But it did, without even a creak. She found herself gliding up the stairs with a grace she’d never achieved before. Had this place turned her into something different? Wherever this place was…
Leo brought you here. You came here to escape Leo. His memory won’t follow you here.
āDinner first,ā the pale girl said, and at the top of the stairs, they entered a room full of figures sitting at long tables. The ceiling of the room disappeared high above them amidst the shadows.
āHe was a real nice fella.ā The pale girl took the seat beside her. āThe tall, dark, handsome type. But then he fell for a different girl, and when I tried to show him how worthless she really was, he spat in my face. And then… he must have gone mad. He tried to kill me.ā
āThat’s awful.ā Jenny shook her head. Leo had been awful towards the end. But he would never have done that.
āWhat about yours?ā The girl quirked an eyebrow.
āLeo was nice too,ā Jenny said softly. His face danced before her imagination, more realistic and concrete than anything in this place. āHe was everything. But he dumped me.ā
āFor a different girl?ā The pale girl sighed. āEveryone here understands, love. Believe me, we understand.ā
Jenny lost her patience. āWhere am I? What is this place?ā She looked down at herself. A flowing white garment had appeared on her body without her even noticing. āWhere are my clothes? What’s going on?ā
The pale girl giggled. āYou got your heart broken, love.ā
āBut where. Am. I?ā
Someone tapped her shoulder. She shrieked and turned to see the bellhop boy standing behind her, dark tears streaking his face. In the same place where they’d been before. She pressed her hand against her chest to steady herself.
Except she had no heartbeat.
āWelcome to the real world. Well⦠not real anymore. No one here believes in us.ā The girl leaned in closer. āNot yet. We make them believe.ā
Jenny couldn’t scream. All she could do was stare at them in horror. The bellhop boy’s tears looked sympathetic; the pale girl’s smile, triumphant.
āYou know how they say you’ll haunt his dreams later?ā The girl let out a wild shriek of laughter. āTime to literally haunt them.ā
She couldn’t beā
āThe car accident was real. So was your broken heart. You’re dead, Jenny.ā
āWe all end up here. You’re one of us now.ā The bellhop sniffled. āBut don’t worry. It’s worth it.ā
āWorth it?ā She didn’t have a family. She was alone. Leo wouldn’t care… āHow can death be worth it?ā
āLeo abandoned you.ā The girl smirked. āHe tried to forget you. But he’ll never forget you again.ā
Her heartbreak smoldered, fizzled out, and died. And all Jenny knew was a single word: haunt.
She smiled for the first time in weeks. āNo, he won’t.ā





HAHA!!!!! I have NO IDEA what song this is from, but still brilliant!!! Great job!
Thank you! <3
Nicely done :-)
This must be Elvisās āHeartbreak Hotelā.
Thanks!
Maybe ;)
Youāre correct, Yorick73! If you’re a member of the Havok Horde, you’ll be automatically entered into a drawing for a $10 Amazon gift card.
Well my guess was Hotel California but probablyyyy not. ;P
Nice job!
Nope, not that one xD
Thanks!
My first thought for song was Dream a Little Dream of Me, but I don’t know if that’s 50s or not. Great job!!! <3
Thanks! It’s not that one ;)
This story is SO CLEVER!! What a fabulous concept! With just the right touch of creepy. ;) Amazing job, friend!!!
Thank you!!!! I’m so glad you liked it ^_^
The characters in this piece are so vivid – I love it!!
Thank you! One of these characters is actually a cameo from one of my other books ;)
I have no idea what song it’s from, but this story is brilliant! I love the chilling imagery and the realization at the end!!! Wow! Masterfully done!
Thank you so much, Jenelle! <3
Oooooh my gracious. What a deliciously chilling story! And that PLOT TWIST. I could NOT stop reading. I had to know what was going on! Wow wow wow! Utterly riveting! The ending seriously gave me goosebumps. Absolutely loved this!!!
I vote Heartbreak Hotel.
Great story, neatly told.
Looking forward to reading more.
Wow, great job sustaining that sense of foreboding throughout the whole story. And a cool idea, too!
I like the notion of a house full of haunts going out to people.
Ahhhhhh sweet revenge. Haunt him she must! :)
Definitely Heartbreak Hotel. Super creepy!! :)
Tall dark and handsome type… š poor Jenny, but you did an amazing job with this story, lovie!
Great! I definitely wanted to read more.
My song guess would be āHaunted houseā by Chris Kevin & the Comics 1959
Oh my gosh, Faith, I LOVE it!! I had no guess what the song was, but if the other person was right about Heartbreak Hotel, that is GENIUS. This is amazing. <3
Definitely Heartbreak Hotel, but a way better interpretation of it than I always got from the song.
I want to guess “My achy breaky heart” but that’s totally not 50s ;p This story though. Wow. I love it and it made my day and it’s just sooooooo amazing ;D
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Love the descriptions in this story, and what a creepy vibe!
Loved it, and I agree with Yorick73 Heartbreak Hotel would be my guess.
Excellent job unfolding the clues to point to Jenny’s true condition. Really enjoyed this ghost story!