By Bethany Kohler
It isn’t positively raining, but there is a mist in the air that seeps through one’s clothes. A young boy stands beneath a lamppost, staring across the cobbled street. One trouser knee is patched, and the other needs patching. He shrugs his shoulders and buries his cold hands deeper into his pockets.
A door opens; light and noise spill into the dark street. The silhouette of a man appears, carrying a cane, with his bowler hat sitting awry. He makes a dismissive gesture toward the ruckus behind him and staggers out into the street.
The boy steps forward. “Spare a copper, sir?”
“Bugger off.”
The boy eyes a ruby ring on the man’s little finger, and the silver knob on his cane.
“You want I should find you a cab, sir?”
“I said bugger off, you little nuisance!” These words are punctuated with an impotent wave of the silver-knobbed cane. The man turns and makes his winding way up the street. Soon he is nothing more than a vague shape in the mist.
The boy follows, slinking through the haze like a cat.
For nearly two miles, up and down the sprawling city streets, the stealthy guttersnipe stalks the oblivious drunk.
Finally, the silver-knobbed cane raps thrice on a red door. It is opened by an elderly gentleman wearing spectacles. He does not seem pleased to see the man in the wayward bowler hat.
The guttersnipe slips closer, carefully staying in the shadows.
“How dare you come here at this time of night,” the old gentleman says savagely. “And in such a state!”
“No need to take that tone with me,” gripes the man with the silver-knobbed cane. “Do you think I came all this way for the pleasure of your company? I’ve got something you’ll want to hear.”
“Well?”
“I was down at The Rose an’ Bird just now. Overheard a gentleman boasting of a recent acquisition. A legendary treasure from the far North, said to possess mystic power.”
“The Stone of Beradura,” the old man mutters. There is a hungry gleam behind his spectacles.
“Yes, the Stone of Beradura. And what’s more, I know where it is and how to get it. But we’ll have to act tonight.”
The guttersnipe steals away unobserved. When he reaches the corner, he breaks into a run. The darkness and the fog prove to be no impediment. He knows exactly where he’s going and weaves the shortest route to get there. After two odd miles, he turns the corner of Arlington Street, and stops at number twenty-three. The street door is unlocked, and he slips inside. He stands for a moment in the vestibule to catch his breath before knocking on the inner door.
“They fell for the bait, Mr. Thorne,” he says when the door opens.
The tall man in the doorway smiles. “Excellent. Good work, Davey.” He disappears for a moment and reappears with one arm already in the sleeve of his trench coat. “I’ll take it from here, lad.” He slips a coin into Davey’s palm.
“Thank’e, sir.” Davey touches his cap.
“There’s just one more favor I would ask of you.”
“What’s that, sir?”
Mr. Thorne begins buttoning his coat. “Would you mind staying and keeping my fire going while I’m out? I may not be back till morning, and I’d rather not come home to a cold grate.”
Davey grins. “I’d be happy to, Mr. Thorne.”
“Excellent!” Mr. Thorne fastens his last button as he and Davey trade places.
Davey stands inside the detective’s apartment with his hand on the door, but he doesn’t close it. “I was just wondering, sir…”
Mr. Thorne pauses at the street door.
Davey cocks his head. “Do you actually have the mystical stone, or is it all a ruse to catch the gem thieves?”
Mr. Thorne’s dark eyes twinkle. He raises his brows mysteriously. “I’m not going to tell you all my secrets at once.”
Before Davey can say another word, the street door closes, and the trench coat melts into the mist.





Oooh, I love the POV perspective on this one and all the intrigue!
Thank you! It was fun to write. :)
What an exciting story! I spent the whole time I was reading wondering what would happen next. I wonder if the detective actually has the gem and what other secrets he has!
I’m so glad you enjoyed it!
This story is so atmospheric. I was intrigued from beginning to end!
intriguing, you’ve set the hook. keep reeling us in…..
Great story!! Loved the gritty feel and I feel like this is a larger story brewing 😍
We have certainly not seen the last of Detective Thorne. :)
I loved the pace of this story! Got lost into the mist immediately and enjoyed a warm ending.
Love the atmospheric setting Bethany! Great world building here. Will there be a sequel?
I hope so! As soon as another suitable Theme comes along. :)
(Maybe the “Europe” Theme coming up in March.)
Bethany! Fabulous story! I love your characters and the tone of the story is perfect. Very Oliver Twist-ish and the like 👏
Thank you! 🙂
Great intriguing story! I like the way you dropped tidbits of information along the way. Excellent mystery!
Fun twist!
You chose the perfect POV for this setting! I love the antecedent-consequent of the open and close: cold boy with a task, warm boy with a reward. I hope this will be a book someday! You write compelling characters.
I wanna know what happens next 😁😉
You have a perfectly functional imagination. 😜
I liked the imagery and story you have here, it definitely makes me want to read more to learn what else is going on in this world! And it was very kind of Mr. Thorne to let Davey stay inside and warm while treating it like Davey was doing him a favor.
What a great story, Bethany! I felt like I was there.
Reading this on a drizzly evening made it all the more emersive. I want more !
Please tell me you are writing more! So intriguing… and within a few sentences I felt as if I was write there in the story!
Yay for Davey! I love the setting of this story. And now I want more!
I got some *serious* Sherlock Holmes vibes… didn’t he have a group of urchins on call to run errands? ;)
Indeed he did!
This is probably my favorite! Its so well written I can easily picture it like an old movie in my head! And of course I wish the story didn’t end there (hint hint) 😜
Oooh, love the unique perspective and ending twist of this one!